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    dots Submission Name: Dripping Darkdots
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    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDripping Darkdots
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    Wind filtered cold through drops
    that broke down the grey sky
    caught up in her dark hair
    and died.

    she too had plans for the rain
    ventured, virgin plans
    those walking down the plains
    beyond the window and her range
    very untried, unhatched
    undomained.

    there were chatters in her mind
    assumed laughters that might
    could happen in some wild
    if by heart, she might went
    and fulfill what the world
    said about the rain.

    but the world is not her
    but the world is not you
    nor them
    but the world is an apostrophe
    possessive case, unrelative
    others' words, others' books
    lively talks but life's quiet
    lips chatter but smiles quiet
    all the time all she does is
    fill the silence with some voice.

    and in the end, her hand lies
    on the window, over rain
    all hushed, unstretched
    unspoken and alone
    no long drives, no friends
    no to-fro romance zone.

    solitude is never touched
    but is seen on milestones
    on sideways, in dark holes
    and is dwelt in single beds
    loneliness is what stays
    between the rain that falls out
    and the drizzle in her head.

    and is felt at the ends
    of every song and the dread
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