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Brick Wall Communion


Author: HisNameIsNoMore
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 75 /194 /254
Words: 176
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Brick Wall Communion



Evacuate this subterfuge carousel of a world---
---Prioritize the swift incarnation of your old,
ragged God;
“All is Just”---heinous tithes and taxes.
Check marks on an agenda made of lies---
---Tyrannical type cast traitors,
typically trite;
“As the crow flies”---crooked in eye.

Redundant repetition of the subtle,
cues and confrontations---
Redundant street hustler mentality,
brass knuckle diplomacy---

Accidental misinterpretations of what we desire---
---The fundamental death of education and values,
bad excuses;
“I’m so sorry”---worthless swine.
Dominoes are unknown to the incumbent collapse---
---Spineless snakes feinting sincerity,
swallowing sovereigns;
“Et Tu, Brute”---all in hand sleights.

Brick by brick we break down and repair,
in hope of making something to remember---
Brick by brick we will never surrender,
through the fog of war and perilous despair---

Swinging rhetoric as an ax in hand---
---Gunpowder Plot , Ephialtes of Trachis,
Night of the Long Knives;
“Once upon a time”---what lies beneath.
A wisdom to live without being one in a million---
---Absently abstract lights adjusting,
alleviating anxiety;
“fortune and fame”---no other way out.




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  Some concepts just go right over the head.
| Posted on 2015-09-18 00:00:00 | by HisNameIsNoMore | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the use of alliteration. Otherwise, statements are self explanatory. Felt like I was reading the paper.
| Posted on 2015-09-18 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TUc4mgZa7hU
| Posted on 2015-09-17 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]


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