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    dots Submission Name: Brick Wall Communiondots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 75/186/232
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBrick Wall Communiondots
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    Evacuate this subterfuge carousel of a world---
    ---Prioritize the swift incarnation of your old,
    ragged God;
    “All is Just”---heinous tithes and taxes.
    Check marks on an agenda made of lies---
    ---Tyrannical type cast traitors,
    typically trite;
    “As the crow flies”---crooked in eye.

    Redundant repetition of the subtle,
    cues and confrontations---
    Redundant street hustler mentality,
    brass knuckle diplomacy---

    Accidental misinterpretations of what we desire---
    ---The fundamental death of education and values,
    bad excuses;
    “I’m so sorry”---worthless swine.
    Dominoes are unknown to the incumbent collapse---
    ---Spineless snakes feinting sincerity,
    swallowing sovereigns;
    “Et Tu, Brute”---all in hand sleights.

    Brick by brick we break down and repair,
    in hope of making something to remember---
    Brick by brick we will never surrender,
    through the fog of war and perilous despair---

    Swinging rhetoric as an ax in hand---
    ---Gunpowder Plot , Ephialtes of Trachis,
    Night of the Long Knives;
    “Once upon a time”---what lies beneath.
    A wisdom to live without being one in a million---
    ---Absently abstract lights adjusting,
    alleviating anxiety;
    “fortune and fame”---no other way out.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Some concepts just go right over the head.
    | Posted on 2015-09-18 00:00:00 | by HisNameIsNoMore | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the use of alliteration. Otherwise, statements are self explanatory. Felt like I was reading the paper.
    | Posted on 2015-09-18 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TUc4mgZa7hU
    | Posted on 2015-09-17 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]


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