Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Autumn Smoke Lucid Dreams Elysium Fieldsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 852
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1158



    Description:
       Enjoy


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAutumn Smoke Lucid Dreams Elysium Fieldsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Humanity billowing---forward like electric steam.
    Swirling---fears scalding the sky,
    screaming away into Heaven;
    light scarred the twilight---water,
    like scratches in vinyl.
    Forward---into the wind---into the night.
    Sounds of the stern wheels---passing by,
    relics of a simpler time;
    coal barges shift to a life declined.

    The trees rain ash---upon the streets,
    orange smears of bygone era---gone;
    rust bleeds---into bells of a forgotten ramble.
    Autumn smoke---fills the emptiness.
    Completing memories---illustrious illusions,
    mighty strikes against her breathless shame;
    naked---slipping into unconsciousness.
    These words will lie,
    reconfigured into a meaningless phrase;
    lucid dreams awake during the day.

    Derogated stutter---a mouth misinterpretation of,
    unconditional---restriction to faith in code;
    land line Churches---reaching for neglectful youth.
    Butcher block---meat tossed to the dogs.
    Scything our Elysium fields,
    dregs of cheap whiskey---all that remains.




    Submitted on 2015-09-18 19:43:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    200675

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Collision written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Just a fantasy written by TiaanK
    The Phoenetians and Us written by Torie
    Hazy Half-Moon written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Shading written by saartha
    No More Damn Love Poems written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Revised written by Darkwarrior
    X written by homeless
    Wisp of You written by rev.jpfadeproof
    After a Dream written by KeeperOfLight
    The Forgotten Umbrella written by garnet4david
    Untitled - 12/12/2017 written by homeless
    Sleeping Giant written by MyPeriodical
    Un Lugar Para Siempre written by SavedDragon
    TSC written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Untitled 2 written by homeless
    your truest people written by Daniel Barlow
    Post Naturalism written by cornonthekob
    Starry night written by rev.jpfadeproof
    'Cause You're Mine, I Walk the Line. written by Torie
    Chèvrefeuille written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Confessions and shit... written by Daniel Barlow
    Eyes written by homeless
    Blank Page written by Chelebel
    coping mechanism written by cornonthekob
    Moon and Me written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Untitled - September 19, 2017 written by homeless
    I Wonder If written by Wolfwatching
    Don't Tell Me You Love Me written by homeless
    rimbaudian reverie written by CrypticBard

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry