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    dots Submission Name: Brain Sick Thingdots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBrain Sick Thingdots

    Streaks on the glass
    of my pupil.
    Iris kaleidoscope
    adjusting to light.
    Splinters of glass
    blurring my thoughts.
    Eyes not understanding
    observing the arcane.
    My mind dreams of love,
    parading my sight.
    It's not what it seems.
    Love's a brain sick thing.
    Watching two lovers,
    holding hands,
    kissing in the street.
    That's not my love.
    My love has strings.
    Scars on my heart,
    heart that slowly fails.
    Frail as the sword of Charlemagne.
    Love's a brain sick thing.

    Submitted on 2015-09-19 01:01:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      if love were logical, clerical, spherical
    the lightning flash of an emotive miracle
    rather than labor and grace and choice
    the world might listen but not to her voice...

    Just a few thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2015-09-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      My definition of love is also a bit different than most. I just can't get into the halmark version of things. However I do sincerely the foundation of love is built on forgiveness, kindness, willingness to give, I believe that vulnerability and gentleness mixed with violent passion make up a grand romance.

    Just some thoughts inspired by this piece.
    | Posted on 2015-09-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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