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    dots Submission Name: A Pound of Fleshdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Pound of Fleshdots
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    The night time sings
    to the lonely bird.
    Soul eaten to the rind.
    Darkness heard in Eden.
    She won't let me in
    those holy gates.
    Faded stars in my hands.
    My head is weak,
    her heart is strong.
    I kiss her lips,
    still she wont' let me in.
    Lover's bargain.
    My soul,
    for a pound of her skin.




    Submitted on 2015-09-19 17:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I got this picture of a tatted up guy trying to make it with a sweet innocent female.

    Faded stars, made me think of ink. Just my visual.

    Otherwise this was a soft endearing read I am happy with as a reader.
    | Posted on 2015-09-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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