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Don't Need You


Author: bluemayskye
ASL Info:    31/F/Portland
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Don't Need You



                         Dont Need You 

( by Jessi Blue )



I feel this immense suspense of an awful kind,
while the thought of seeing you sends me out of my mind.

I don't want to.
I can't.
It's got to get better sometime.

You won't take me,
Can't make me.
I'll never give you the time.

Again to batter me,
Shatter me,
Or tell me I do not matter
Please!
You just can't or won't see
The real me.
While I reel from what I see...

It's true that nothing ventured is nothing gained,
But once the gain is all pain then the ventures' vain.

No matter what you think
I tried
No matter if you care
I cried
What's saddest is the fact that I hurt so bad it feels like you died.

I will succeed with this seed of fight in my mind
You might've sought to conquer me but I will vanquish the kind
Of thoughts that haunt me
That taunt me with the way that you flaunted
All your special connections
with ones we both are of next kin.

I'm going to turn the negative to goodness in my life.

But not for you.
Not to you.
Not with you.
Don't need you




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  Wonderful word play. A very meaningful poem with delightful wording. It almost danced on the page. The rhythm wad almost like a heart beat through the whole piece slowing toward the end to really pound the message home, that is over, now the cleaning up and moving on begins.
| Posted on 2015-10-02 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
  Its true that nothing ventures is nothing gained
But once the pain is all gain the ventures vain

That line made this piece what it is, not only is this brilliantly said, true, and just awesome the structure and use of alliteration is fantastic. I also thought the placement was perfect, the buildup and then the conclusion behind it. I honestly didn't think this would be much to begin with but the space format and straightforward language mixed with some really witty ways with words, this is great! Thank you for sharing.
| Posted on 2015-09-26 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Its true that nothing ventures is nothing gained
| Posted on 2015-09-26 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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