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    dots Submission Name: Valley Hollowdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 75/182/208
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 428



    Description:
       A poem of alliteration, or at least my valiant attempt.


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    dotsValley Hollowdots
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    Visceral valley of vivisection vices---
    Always alienating those---
    Languishing louts---
    Lacking lucidity of---
    Every Epicurean epilogue that---
    Yearned for yokefellow---

    However hollow the hungry Hell---
    Only the obstreperous---
    Languishing louts---
    Lacking lucidity of---
    Objection on oblation---
    Wandered woefully whispering wrath---




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    ||| Comments |||
      Sell-dem Systems Sacred--
    Cysts Connect Coined Coal-
    Diamonds Deliver Dogma-
    Feeling Form their Folds-

    Play Passive Pray they Prey-
    Tomorrow times Telemetry-
    Many moated man that may-
    Pick the pricks with prickly picks-

    Quite Qualm-ed Quantified Quarry-
    Assassins asked allotted angels-
    Bar berries before boasting-
    help hellish harps hate-

    sacred systems seldom?
    Coal-coined-connect-a-christ
    Dharma-delivered- Diamonds
    Folds their forming feeling

    Prey>they pray=passive play
    Telemetry Times Tomorrow;
    May, That Man Moated! Many!
    Picks prickly with pricks? The PICK,

    Quarry Quantified. Qualm-ed? Quite.
    Angles-allotted+asked assassins=
    boasting before berries, bar
    hate harps. Hellish help.
    | Posted on 2015-09-30 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]


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