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    dots Submission Name: The Warm Muzzle and the Eardots
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    Author: Torie
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 204/224/59
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsThe Warm Muzzle and the Eardots
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    Should I be grateful for your ears?
    Should I borrow your ears, or should I make a down payment and take out a mortgage?
    With my warm muzzle whispering in your ear, you feel light and airy, taking off in a Spitfire to fight and destroy the Hun.

    We weep for you catching fire in the sky, burning bright as the Sun, as the beautiful Spitfire begins it's death dive to Earth.

    Yet, as you scream to your death, you hear my voice in your ear, calm and measured, reassuring. You could be sitting beside a pond with Monet, picnicking, quietly whispering, high on fire, a lonely impuse of delight, my last breath whispering in your ear.




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      It started out with observations over emotions about the ear and then turns into sort of a friend or loved one appealing to the character in question. Right? Its funny BC I use to have a really similar style in that I would personify something with emotion that seems emotionless like expressing gratitude for an ear. Here I am supposing that really you are just saying, I am glad you can hear me. But I like the way you present it. Reminds me of a Picasso abstract, like the ear in this piece would be exaggerated and there would be a figure next to it sort of ascending backwards unproportionally in the shape of a message bubble.

    Are you Monet in this piece? The artist? Its like look friend what you could be, I implore you to see this differently before you utterly destruct.

    I could be way off, yet it seems like you are reaching out and trying to express that in this beautify picturesque way. God bless your intentions!
    | Posted on 2015-10-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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