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    dots Submission Name: Can you see medots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsCan you see medots
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    Come to me and I shall make you smile…
    Close your eyes and see me my dear…Can you?

    Look in the dark, can you see that child?
    The child cries as it does not know what love is.
    Look at the only street light that god gave the child,
    as he cries there being alone.

    Look in the dark, can you see that child?
    The child cries as it does not know what happiness is.
    Look at the tears rolling down into the empty void floor,
    as he cries there being sad.

    Look in the dark, can you see that child?
    The child cries as it does not know who will save him.
    Look at the hope that the child has for him to be saved,
    as he cries there drowning in the dark.

    Save that child my dear before the child drowns.
    Save that child my dear before the child kills himself.
    Save that child my dear before he forgets why he is alive.
    Save that child and watch him smile.

    Come to me and I shall make you smile…
    Close your eyes and see me my dear…Can you?




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      and the child died yesterday...within me there is nothing...even darkness had a meaning...should I live?
    | Posted on 2015-10-08 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]
      A child named amanda? That's really all i guess.
    Children should be children but even they can get depressed,
    sad that it is that we know that properly
    the difference between sorrow, and the cover up of
    "oh that's just personality"

    Sadness to the sadest is a condition to live with
    sadness to the sadist is how their teeth developed
    to pry apart the difference, is to let the river flow
    and hope it one day dries, before the sadist ever knows.

    (i might have missed the point, i've been working 18hour+days the last few months.)
    | Posted on 2015-10-01 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]


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