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    dots Submission Name: What the reality isdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsWhat the reality isdots
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    Justifiably thin, the thread in your head is
    And someplace else, wherever that else is
    My only objection sole and discreet, that is
    I haven't many questions, but I think this entire ordeal is
    Anyway, couldn't you have taken what this is?
    I'm digging around inside, possibly dissatisfied as is
    Wait, just one more question,
    Who am I talking to? Whoever this is?




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      Who are you talking to? Who are you talking to, mate? And whoever am I? Who am I?

    As the meaning of your communication is my response, I am now your reality. Tough I know, handing your reality over to a complete stranger. But who knows, I might strangle you or allow you breathe deeply and freely.

    And well may you ask, who am I? I am the scion of an aristocratic culture, brutal, loving the outdoors, jealously cutting down tall poppies, but still retaining more than verstiges of the old spoken, preliterate culture, retaining the old distinctions of rank, title and class in the very way we speak.

    Are you grateful or are you resentful?
    | Posted on 2015-10-08 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]


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