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Author: dear
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in the faint of day:

from the moment... You wake
when the first lick of sun spreads warmth upon your face. gently stirring you from your sleep

And you find,

i have gone. Understand;
we can not be anything more in the morn's sweet light

; know that I'm still in the night




Submitted on 2015-10-02 22:22:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  And although my eyes keep yards away

Steady focus, steady tears
but it never really has been
difficult in these

times apart

Not many - few, in fact
but it really has been
too long.
| Posted on 2015-10-07 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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