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    dots Submission Name: Clouds in Rudelanddots
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    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsClouds in Rudelanddots
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    Now we live in the land of the rude.
    Everyone is hiding totally nude.
    We act like we have no brain
    to do what seems the most insane.
    Everything is in order
    Everything for personal gain.

    We are us and we stand no chance
    as we dance the destructive dance.
    We kill ourselves in the end.
    Unable or unwilling to bend.
    Feel for us no sorrow
    We know what meant 'tomorrow.'

    Collaboration of annihilation. Now we're dead.
    From our evil the world turned red.
    The slayer unleashed rings a bell.
    Who thought trumpets could be so loud.
    I guess we'll meet back in hell.
    Sit back and watch the mushroom cloud




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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the message you're trying to get across. I feel the same way most of the time. This is my most common advice, but try writing all that emotion down without forcing the rhyming. There are many good poets/poems that don't use rhyming. Sometimes really great writing comes straight from your brain to your keyboard or paper without thinking about it too much. Raw.
    Let me know if you do a rewrite, I've love to give it a look.
    | Posted on 2015-10-23 00:00:00 | by ColdinSummer | [ Reply to This ]


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