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    dots Submission Name: Glacier Eyesdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsGlacier Eyesdots
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    This is one of those
    Stranger-requests
    Taken that the rest cave at my feet
    Out with the corrosion heading home
    Passed what of me I didn’t want you to know

    Made to the man drawn in recovery
    Slipped before my fingers catch hold, all his words
    Lodged between them and teeth-shredded nails
    As many of his words as I may have entailed

    So I can’t write.
    Not with them stitched
    Bit by bit to your table and
    These legs
    Dangling off your chair as they had in the summer
    From the open blinds and their open blades,
    Both your complexity and simplicity earns spotlight upon the stage
    Transient as they alternate
    Clear as day and flashing as your eyes dine at my lips

    Had it not been for listening in
    I would have failed to knock, but at my window you fare
    Grin melting quick as the snow in my hair

    They didn’t believe me when I said that
    You’re as cold as the winter air.




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      Nice write. Good imagery. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-10-14 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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