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    dots Submission Name: pick me updots

    Author: iliveinazoo
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 1/1/1
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotspick me updots

    puppies. breathing. cherry pie
    pick me up, I want to die
    make me want to feel once more
    take me to the sunny shore
    build a castle on my head
    shells and crabs and feeling dread
    slap my face, cut my hair
    gulping, gulping, there is no air
    I float away on jellyfish
    stinging, swaying, burning wish
    sinking down, blue depths below
    torture, grief you'll never know
    leave me here, I changed my mind
    my wretched body you'll never find

    Submitted on 2015-10-10 21:54:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm. well since you live in a zoo will I need a permit? meh, jokes aside sounds like you're goin through some stuff. kinda hard to pick out exactly what that is from these words here. sounds like bi-polar depression. but i'm not a doctor. I suppose if you don't want picked up, then just don't be. peace be with.
    | Posted on 2015-10-10 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]

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