Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: pick me updots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: iliveinazoo
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 1/1/1
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 463
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 527



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotspick me updots
    -------------------------------------------


    puppies. breathing. cherry pie
    pick me up, I want to die
    make me want to feel once more
    take me to the sunny shore
    build a castle on my head
    shells and crabs and feeling dread
    slap my face, cut my hair
    gulping, gulping, there is no air
    I float away on jellyfish
    stinging, swaying, burning wish
    sinking down, blue depths below
    torture, grief you'll never know
    leave me here, I changed my mind
    my wretched body you'll never find




    Submitted on 2015-10-10 21:54:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      hmm. well since you live in a zoo will I need a permit? meh, jokes aside sounds like you're goin through some stuff. kinda hard to pick out exactly what that is from these words here. sounds like bi-polar depression. but i'm not a doctor. I suppose if you don't want picked up, then just don't be. peace be with.
    | Posted on 2015-10-10 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    200752

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    prison written by ShyOne
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    You read free written by poetotoe
    Cover written by saartha
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    no words for how graceful you are in this moment written by Daniel Barlow
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Yes written by poetotoe
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Carry written by saartha
    Love written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Every..... written by jackz
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry