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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Tressesdots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFallen Tressesdots
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    Her golden tresses float
    one by one-- down
    No longer her crowning glory;
    simply a reminder of what was--
    what cannot be--
    tormented by those perfect coiffures surrounding.
    She would gather gossamer strands to bosom,
    had she one to do so;
    perhaps, even collect them to be worn again.

    If only there were strength to be had....
    Yet fortitude flew like Spring
    taking with it the Summer joys
    'til all that remains is the falling.
    She awaits now.
    There is but one final season
    and her barren soul reflects the trees...
    naked; dormant; forgotten
    as her golden tresses float down.




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      It's really a bitter sweet piece. You paint quite a visual of this woman...succumbing to breast cancer...haunted and remembering of her Spring...locked into her Fall...knowing...Winter is at her door. Thank you for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2015-11-03 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah appropriate. I love the personification with fall, the golden leaves falling like hair, that you kept it feminine (mother nature) and it reminded me if cutting my hair after I gave birth to Mikhael. There are many different seasons emotionally, spiritually and also literally. To me this piece captured it all. High praises I really enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2015-10-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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