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    dots Submission Name: Another Daydots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAnother Daydots
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    You rise from bed
    Correct your head
    You lift the blinds
    Address the day
    You put your dreams,
    your dreams away

    Comb your hair
    Cover up what's bare
    You feed the cat
    Put out the dog
    What takes this day,
    this day so long

    Drive the car
    To and fro
    Everywhere, it's just a blur
    Past lawns awaiting weekly manicure
    You've heard that one,
    that one before

    Home again
    you check the mail
    like there really should be something there
    run fingers through your thinning hair
    there must be something better,
    something better out there




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      "there must be something better,
    something better out there"

    This line cut like a dull knife across my heart. We've all experienced the mundane of every day life. It can be a struggle to find excitement and meaning in life, and for what it's worth, I truly hope you find it.
    | Posted on 2015-11-05 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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