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    dots Submission Name: Inside, outsidedots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsInside, outsidedots
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    Inside the prison gates
    I had a dream
    That she would wait to find me
    Not for an hour or a day
    But wait she would
    Till demons or angels took me away

    On postcard beach
    In escapist sleep
    As oceans edge and sanguine sun rendezvous
    We wander in unison
    Committing savagery,
    through surreptitious smiles

    Outside my skin
    A covering I never owned
    I give credence to that, which I no longer know
    that comfort which burdened me
    left longing for another
    alone and forgotten





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