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    dots Submission Name: Clenched Teethdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsClenched Teethdots
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    I cried your name
    From behind cleanched teeth
    For fear of showing
    How weak ive become

    Dont you know
    There's no one else
    I need by my side
    No one else I want

    So how do I
    Tell you
    About the demons
    I see at night?

    Maybe I've
    Grown afraid
    Of dreaming

    It's been easier
    To just run
    And hide

    But thats not living
    No thats barely breathing

    I cried your name
    From behind cleanched teeth
    For fear of asking you
    For the help I need

    Don't you know
    There's no one else
    I trust with my fears
    No one else I can tell

    So how do I
    Show you
    To these tired eyes
    You are the light

    It takes strength
    To heal
    It takes faith
    To ask for help

    Don't you know
    I'm begging you
    Please

    I cried your name
    From behind
    Clenched teeth

    I cried your name
    Hoping it was loud
    Enough to reach your ears

    But here I stand
    Barely whispering
    Here I stand
    Here I stand
    Waiting for dawn




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      I like the message you are sending out. "I cried your name from behind clenched teeth" was my favorite line because I can feel something from it. I've been in many situations where I've felt that helpless/scared/angry feeling, asking for help, but just so that no one actually hears it.
    | Posted on 2015-10-23 00:00:00 | by iliveinazoo | [ Reply to This ]


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