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    dots Submission Name: A King to Medots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA King to Medots
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    Like floating magic things,
    His hands above his face
    His eyes direct them as if they were wands
    Rather than wandering lights

    He moans
    A question I will never know
    And never know how to answer

    His fingers dance
    As if they were running through my hair
    Or the water from the kitchen faucet

    Back and forth
    His hands sway

    Up
    Then
    Down

    Magnificent child at play
    Innocent discovering boy

    You are mine
    For a little while
    I am an audience you will always please
    Entertained by the simplicity of your entertainment

    I watch you, glances that turn into intense gaze's
    I listen to the symphony and grace of your song
    A mind that mirrors my own in natures most literal translation,
    My sweet sweet beautiful son




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      Awesome!
    | Posted on 2016-01-18 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful... maybe even more so because I know and love that precious little boy.

    This brought tears to my eyes, and kind of made me miss when Devlin was like this...
    | Posted on 2016-01-01 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      how children teach us
    to gather the moments
    into magnificent lessons
    and pleasures and dreams

    that will never be measured
    through fierce competitions
    as if perfection were bettered
    on a scale of esteem...

    Just a few thoughts on your own. Enjoy the innocence.
    | Posted on 2015-10-27 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww, this is beautiful Lori. Motherhood is so sublimely surreal.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-10-24 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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