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    dots Submission Name: Rolling in the Grassdots
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    Author: Torie
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 204/224/59
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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    Description:
       The hidden world is hiding from us. So we play hide and peek waiting for a revelation.


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    dotsRolling in the Grassdots
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    Behind everything is a hidden world
    In which every blade of grass is dreaming
    We don't dare wake them up
    It would be like knowing what everyone thought at all times - it would be hell.

    But still, it is nice to peek.
    Some of us peek by cheating with alcohol, known as the poor person's mysticism,
    And some drunks hear the grasses sing.
    But cheating only gets us so far, then the door closes behind us, shutting us out.

    Some of us fall in love with the hidden world and seek it out.
    But we find it can't be found, and we must wait for our lover to come to us.
    And then what a suprise we get
    As the sunrise whispers in our ear, and we roll in the grass in ecstasy.




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      I was thinking something similar about my bath water, the bubbles were rotating in opposing patterns creating a universe 🌌 of bubbly life.

    I like cheating sometimes but not so much with alcohol. It has been like two years but I still remember what it is like to inhale the smoke and tune into or out of anything.
    | Posted on 2015-11-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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