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    dots Submission Name: Losing It dots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLosing It dots
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    Losing It

    Imagine yourself gone.
    Sometime when you've had it
    up to the fluffy white top of your patient head
    when your children won't stop name-calling
    and dropping bombs
    when you can't find fIfty or even ten
    let alone one
    man or woman who remembers mercy
    who still knows how to love
    let there be
    no more.

    Let every tree and weed and flower crash
    with a cosmic commotion
    let dry land sink into the oceans
    let the oceans circle the drain
    let every living creature walk or swim or fly
    into that swirling oblivion
    let the light in every human eye flicker out
    pull a blanket of darkness over your head
    close your eyes
    and rest.




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      or let my version of the earth succumb
    to the moment when dreams melt, become
    the emptiness that each soul craves
    as the universe recoils from the shock, we wake
    | Posted on 2015-11-05 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Given the state of affairs in the world these days, this poem struck a chord with me. Every so often, I think...what would God do? I saw a movie many years ago where the antagonist said that the only way to solve an unsolvable problem is to smash it and start over again. Maybe God feels the same way?

    Thank you for sharing!

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2015-11-01 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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