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    dots Submission Name: The Kidnapping Sobrietydots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Kidnapping Sobrietydots
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    Well here I sit,
    with cigarette in hand,
    a thought biting the tip of my tongue.
    A lot like licking this burning cherry,
    one spark in the night and slow die within.
    Fading like sunrise---I vanish again,
    scattering my remains across the floor;
    lower my expectations---the glass froze,
    half empty of course.

    Well there I sat,
    with fingers burning numb,
    cigarette smoke biting the tip of my sense.
    A lot like smelling her Cod fish flesh,
    a name slipping through a long sad past-
    Drowning in simple objects---she adores,
    She tells me tales of her simple scars,
    and it becomes clear just how fragile we are;
    a whore not worth kissing---a human no more!

    Well here I stand,
    no use for “if” and “when,”
    just the power of flesh within sin.
    Phantoms of make believe let dreams descend,
    Into real raging fires of lust for gold;
    validation of what woman spoke!

    Well there I stood…




    Submitted on 2015-11-02 17:15:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I do wish the poem were more centered, less...mixture in its message(s), as it makes it difficult for the reader to discern one from another. If it were up to me, the second stanza would be all its worth, and revolve all other ideas around it.
    "A lot like smelling her Cod fish flesh," when I first took this in, my initial thoughts were of a close, very close friend of mine whose name means Salmon in one language, but "Furry" in another; Julia.

    Because I do wish I'd have the chance to smell hers - no matter how fishy it may come off.
    | Posted on 2015-11-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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