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    dots Submission Name: tumbling downdots
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    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    dotstumbling downdots
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    tumbling down

    you realize that placing people on high pedestals
    is like king kong falling from the empire state
    eventually they tumble down from absurd greatness
    you once saw and are left confused
    that once a majestic creature,
    ruler of the world that’s yours
    is nothing but a charlatan
    splattered on the street without reign
    and you’re free from this fantasy
    you made up in your head
    of the bed you created
    and the love you feigned
    because the truth was much too black
    and you loved yourself a little less
    each day to make room inside your head
    of the things that were always wrong with you
    so to make someone great
    but just like gravity
    a tossed apple always falls




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      I like the visual of King 👑 Kong. It made this have comedic value on a serious note. It changed the tone of anger or judgement into sarcasm or polite observation. It gave another layer to your story.

    What goes up must inevitably go back down. There is a line in a song I am diggin these days,

    "I touched the sky when my knees hit the ground"

    The evaluation of spirit due to humility. Gorgeous.
    | Posted on 2015-11-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I read so many love poems on this site that describe how they're partner is the cure for all that is evil in their world. It comes as no surprise to me that so many of them end in heartache.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-11-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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