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    dots Submission Name: A Tale of Happy and Whydots
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    Author: Snow9
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 38/21/17
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       Here I am, one year later, with a piece one year old


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    dotsA Tale of Happy and Whydots
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    What, if any,
    is the difference in loving without expectations
    and loving hopelessly?
    Between the why with Sullivan and Helen Keller,
    and with K and Sumari?
    Why grapple with dry roots that only grow to entangle? Why should I care for you, Ophelia?


    And why not?
    (Since I'm no prince Hamlet)

    A memory quivers following love rebuked -
    of embarrassment when the umbrella,
    sticking out of my school bag,
    handed an opportunity to a bully.
    I sneer in imitation of

    the langaur on the roof-top of the shop before which
    I got down for a cold drink.
    Or, of my grimace when on a trip
    mother's hair (for all my familiarity with
    it at the food table)
    flies into my face, and
    disturbed the taste of the valley tea garden.
    (Human beings cannot bear too much seriousness).

    My happiness ebbs and flows, and is like
    of one that, after the lunch, readies its fur
    for a nap.
    Yes, it's mostly happiness.
    It's only that when I put pen to paper,
    the words, in their silence and small reach,
    quiver like sorrow. Its like
    the laughter that does not expire with the joke,
    but brings out the asthma,
    what brings out your resemblance
    with fools.

    ('You just think too much.')




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