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    dots Submission Name: Contradicted Me || part 28dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/What is
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    I just wanted this idea out there, but my lack of sleep hasn't exactly aided my writing


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    dotsContradicted Me || part 28dots
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    I know for a fact that you're watching me from peripheral vision
    Can tell by the way your pupils center
    and switch from one side of the room to another when I come to see
    that your head's turned toward me.

    Or is it the direction I aspire for?

    The theater's lights wind and round
    For one meager moment
    Zip
    they're gone

    It turned midnight just then.

    But the Sun hid itself long ago
    Beneath the mountains, and the dawn of its sky

    to do what it will with it
    shrieking wild fire at it
    somewhere there the good Sun seeks
    the livery it'd always aspire for

    And suddenly I relate with the both
    of time and will and accountability
    for what I never knew was my own destiny...

    The position I've been aspiring for.




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