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    dots Submission Name: Raindots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/244/159
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsRaindots
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    How intimate it makes you feel,
    this autumn rain inside my palm,
    the dripping cars, the wetted trees,
    the slipping slope of a forgotten craft –
    but not quite yet.

    We are compelled to draw these lines
    under the studded sky, as if these lines
    were drawn adrift another lake, another time,
    another space.

    This can’t be us, surely, so full of hate
    and indignation, and insatiable
    curiosity, come!, one photo more
    to shock us into waves of grief and outrage.

    Have we changed? Barely. Pray, do,
    but look: how rain soaks locks of hair
    strewn
    across the sand and asphalt.




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