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    dots Submission Name: sit-down dinnerdots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotssit-down dinnerdots
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    in our giving of thanks
    we find intrinsic value
    much more than places
    in both directions of
    that decimal point ●

    a sequined moment
    etched in time's fickle
    precipice, caught only
    with intention and at

    times a whole lot of

    personal courage and
    swallowing of pride;
    we've really nothing
    to hide from each other

    ● except maybe the odd
    awkward embarrassment
    that harasses the mind
    while the carving knife
    lifts and catches light○




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      I thought that was just my family, or at least its been that way. Growing up that awkwardness crept in as I began to realize my own family was separated from the rest. We were poor. Our house was messy and small. So coming together with others that valued a different lifestyle was awkward for fear of judgement. Now I am all grown up, I have my own house, I carve my own damn turkey, and those that choose to come have nothing to feel awkward about.


    I enjoyed reading this. I like the structure, the word choice. The moments of pause elaborate on that feeling I believe you were expressing. Our thoughts are on that intrinsic value, gathering together we are all too self aware. And the point that it is silliness. Thank you for sharing. Very good read.
    | Posted on 2015-12-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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