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    dots Submission Name: between birth and agonydots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsbetween birth and agonydots

    At times life reminds me of a cello
    Being ripped and chomped with a chainsaw
    Are u following me?
    Are you covered by that same musical blood-splatter?
    And once again it’s all about
    A plunge downhill screaming
    With brakes on fire through curves careening
    And the world becomes a billion butterflies
    Being mutilated in a blender.
    I fall out of her eyes and try desperately to breathe
    This is a dream and I know I am dreaming
    Just as I know that once I was awake but will
    Wake again, nevermore.
    Those gates of granite and Iron before love can
    Become a ruckus of rain and rust through to my
    Too late
    I am smoking in the everafter
    Sure it is true love
    But unfortunately happily
    Is just a fairytale

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    ||| Comments |||
      Perhaps you could narrate my life. It's full of moments like these.
    | Posted on 2016-09-27 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, with a little trucker's parlance for our additional enlightenment.

    | Posted on 2015-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Once again your morosely animated antics have created a hit. I can hear the cello's splinters flying, almost taste my butterfly smoothy. Who knew that morbidity could be such fun??

    | Posted on 2015-11-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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