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    dots Submission Name: Sinkingdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSinkingdots
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    Feel of the water coming over,
    letting myself sink 6 feet under.
    Reminiscence in every bubble,
    a gasp for all my troubles

    Brittle bones becoming colder.
    The glow of the moon, still darker.
    Soon in the midst I will be
    within the stomach of the sea.

    The visions came pouring in,
    my stitches in time, again and again
    At first with exuberance,
    then rapidly with despondence.

    Take this pain that’s infecting me.
    Leave the best of my memories.
    Like curtains at tearful shows,
    I draw my eyes to a close.




    Submitted on 2015-12-01 16:45:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lying in the midst of nothing shows
    the learning curve of surrendered souls
    who've clawed at the buoyancy of night
    wiser than owls relearning flight...

    Just my thoughts on yours.


    | Posted on 2015-12-08 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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