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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsso, here we aredots
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    Sing! Fashion in place of decor,
    where this fondness can bedeck--
    do away with impulse or regret,

    tarry some, awhile beloved pet

    don't promise tomorrow, now;
    ornate raiment we shall forget-
    a briefest moment's monument.



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    Submitted on 2015-12-03 05:03:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I find myself wanting more. What you have really provokes curiosity. Maybe more examples of this point you are trying to make, though i suppose in this format I can appreciate the subtle bod towards your idea.

    Though I may point out that, tarry some, is great advice. Your structure is your strong point. You say much with the talent for word placement. I reckon I was simply left wanting. That's ok just give us more in the form of continued submissions!
    | Posted on 2015-12-03 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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