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    dots Submission Name: Myrtle's Moonshinedots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 51/165/170
    Words: 264
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    dotsMyrtle's Moonshinedots
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    The most free I have ever felt
    Was running naked on the beach
    Skinny dipping In The great Atlantic.
    Without a care in the world no thoughts
    Of what if.

    Bare, swimming under the moonlight
    Being Young and wanderlust.
    Pulling me towards you
    Such an unannounced rendezvous.

    Floating in the sea.

    Life guard stands no longer
    stand alone at night.
    Not after .......
    The view of the horizon.
    The hues of the blues.
    The waves crashing in and out
    like our emotions .


    As the stars shined down
    Our footprints left behind.
    I looked back and took note
    Of what our path looked like.
    Our prints side by side
    Temporary impressed
    Just for that one night.

    Myrtle's Moonshine.

    The passion
    The plead

    "Two pods in a pea."

    At the end of it all
    I do believe
    It went like :
    "Why you'd have to go and let it die."


    Years later, completely unexpected
    This story meets my ears.
    While my brother standing near.

    The gentleman said "he loved living at the sea
    And that I wouldn't believe what sights he has seen."
    I pointed out his binoculars and asked if he was a creeper,
    He continued to describe my memories to me.

    Afterwards he asked if I still wanted the lease.

    "Without a care of what if......."

























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      You are getting there.

    Float in an Ocean


    Free! I am here forever free
    when I play naked on the beach
    skinny dipping in The Great Atlantic
    without a care in my world of thoughts.

    Bare, I swim under the moonlight
    I try to be young, wanderlust
    an ocean pull towards you
    such your rendezvous.

    A life guard stands no more
    I stand alone in the moonlight
    in plane view of the blue horizon
    we in its waves to play in and out
    as tidal waves crash our emotions.


    While stars shine down
    our footprints left behind
    I looked back and took note
    of what our path may look like
    in foot prints side by side erased
    temporal impressions of one night.

    Myrtle's Beach of delights moonshine
    our passions, our pleas float cocooned
    two peas in a peapod to be grown again
    at the end of it all I do believe love awaits
    you have gone and let me drown I know not.
    | Posted on 2015-12-06 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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