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    dots Submission Name: sweet nothings revealdots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 368/381/224
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    in stillness lay a day
    under the trembling air
    Zephyr's dulcet exhaling
    plucks gently on a lyre

    subtle melodies to ear
    each note snatches droplets
    of sweet nectar; of delight
    covert by fronds dancing

    in the belly of the night
    all through wee measures
    pleasant whispers portray
    fond joys and merry play



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    Submitted on 2015-12-05 04:21:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this style of personifying nature comes effortlessly to you. The awesome part is that the structure and word choice connect in such an elevated level of sophistication that if one did not know one way or the other the language would seem like you worked hard on this. I think that you are fluent in this and even blossom in this kind of writing. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed this chilly reminder of the new season.
    | Posted on 2015-12-05 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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