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    Author: Pollens
    Elite Ratio:    1.04 - 4/27/34
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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              it had the appearance of walking           through a tunnel
              but when i came up on it
              each trunk
              or when a limb hung down
              or where the sky fell
              through.




    Submitted on 2015-12-08 02:51:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      An elephants trunk feel on you little mousy.
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