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    dots Submission Name: Walnut Dustdots
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    Author: SilverScent
    ASL Info:    27/Female/England
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 94/108/72
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 305
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    Bytes: 531



    Description:
       About dementia.


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    dotsWalnut Dustdots
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    Years of loose threads
    cloaked disease -
    peeled follicles and shell;
    scooped walnut
    and replaced it with sheer dust.

    Hollow dimples gouge
    the surface of memory;
    familiar is unfamiliar
    and usual is brand new -
    I'm home and
    I'm lost.

    Dull black
    grasped my hand
    dragged me by the neuron
    inside its blank walls
    and left me like a baby
    without mother
    or a door

    or a name.




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      AS I was reading I thought it was about dementia and I looked up and you had written it was...so message got across well. Im home and Im lost, that line made me feel so sad for people who have this disease. Thank you for sharing
    | Posted on 2015-12-23 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      I appreciate this window into the disease. I do not have any intimate experience with this and I believe that is what you brought to the table. I specifically liked all the elements you brought together in doing it, the scientific, emotional, experience, personification of the disease by human experience.

    I have lost my share of loved ones, never been sick with anything more than the flu. I lost one relative to Alzheimer's and I was young, I was confused and hurt by it. I think had someone come along with this kind of insight I may have been able to grasp more of what I was dealing with. This is good. Thank you for sharing
    | Posted on 2015-12-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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