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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    Surrender the day
    All of the anger, given away
    Breathe,
    breathe deep.
    Strewn on the bed in a heap.
    I allow myself relief, from all I’ve seen.
    I allow myself; start to dream

    I can see it all now
    Placated smile across Picasso face,
    allowed.
    I’ve come tonight to escape
    What is tomorrow’s inevitable fate
    I allow myself relief, from all I’ve seen
    I allow myself; start to dream

    I’ve been here before, this state of embrace
    Carefree, confident, recognized face;
    Embrace.
    Making my way, creating my own
    Another dimension taken out on loan
    I allow myself relief, from all I’ve seen
    I allow myself; I live this dream




    Submitted on 2015-12-08 20:23:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is a very pretty poem indeed. Sounds like advise from a Zen master. Well written!
    | Posted on 2015-12-17 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]


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