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    Author: Pollens
    Elite Ratio:    1.04 - 4/27/34
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   I want you to picture
    a shape, a puzzle piece if
    you like. But, a shape.
    Just a shape.




    1.                foot in the past
    2.                regrets i lived with

    3.                my children
    4.                my family



    5.                the little breaths i took for others
    6.                hope i held and- gave up

    7.                love



    8.                Again, love.





    These numbers;
    all of them existing at once
    no two of them in play at the same time
    flashing. so fast. so randomly.
    they created a sphere:



    how the world i lived in
    was not one you
    imagined.





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