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    dots Submission Name: Apartmentdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A love poem to living alone.


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    dotsApartmentdots
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    Honey from the kitchen.
    Rain from the window.

    Having slept
    all day, I now
    move silent and smooth,
    as if not moving at all

    like a still cup
    of clear water

    I slip from room to room,
    this apartment
    in which I live alone

    watching the streets
    flood lightly

    watching the air
    eddy around a candleflame

    my hands like
    foreign territories

    Who knew, all I needed
    was a little more absence,
    more and more
    and more quiet

    a lessening
    sense of self

    as though I could
    slip out into the night
    and never be found.




    Submitted on 2015-12-13 00:58:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This fits with the sermon I heard visiting my daughter's church today. It had to do with giving yourself some space and time, a little reserve from the hectic. AKA God's commandment to take a day off once a week to rest from the day to day. One of the "big ten"... pause and rest, regardless.

    Nice fit for me today.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2015-12-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "Who knew, all I needed
    was a little more absence,
    more and more
    and more quiet

    a lessening
    sense of self"

    who knew that
    no one would pursue
    the ghosts of our best days
    both delicate and strange

    so little of the light
    so little of the dark
    the self has never left
    but I can't speak for the heart

    Just some words on yours.

    | Posted on 2015-12-13 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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