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    Author: Pollens
    Elite Ratio:    1.04 - 4/27/34
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    imagine if you will a noise, a trampoline, the world's rules, feet
    slap at the surface like water buckles
    the side of a pool.
    laughter.











                                                                          fodder.

                                                                                                    reality.








    Counter to this,


    at the extremity.


    a great weight
    crashing down



              never returning.







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