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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Pollens
    Elite Ratio:    1.04 - 4/27/34
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    imagine if you will a noise, a trampoline, the world's rules, feet
    slap at the surface like water buckles
    the side of a pool.



    Counter to this,

    at the extremity.

    a great weight
    crashing down

              never returning.

    Submitted on 2015-12-15 02:09:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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