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    dots Submission Name: The Christmas Mousedots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
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    dotsThe Christmas Mousedots
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    Twas a week before Christmas and all through the house
    There was a whole bunch of stirring even by a mouse
    So I cornered him and stomped that little vermin bastard!
    Then I fed him to the cat who said "yummy yummy in my tummy" and I said well, what do ya know about that?
    A talking cat.

    The End




    Submitted on 2015-12-21 08:48:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    you want Iambic pentameter?

    How about a crown of SONNETS in Iambic Pentameter?

    Check out my
    "I am a salesman"

    thanks

    | Posted on 2016-11-24 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      This would have rocked my socks of if you had kept the iambic pentameter throughout.

    This says however, this is not the night before Christmas. Lol. Very amusing.

    Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-12-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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