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    dots Submission Name: whispersdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotswhispersdots
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    She opens her eyes
    Tastes the poison on her lips
    Feels overwhelmingly defeated before she begins
    There are voices
    Telling her
    Another day to face
    And it wont bring her any joy

    Her feet slide off the bed
    She wills herself to pray
    Help Me
    Her eyes open just a bit wider
    The smell of coffee drifts from the kitchen
    Oh help is on the way

    Breathing helps
    Walking helps
    Step by step the voices fade

    The house is silent
    The walls keep her sleeping loved ones safe
    She opens up a familiar book
    Bound with leather
    Filled with enough hope to fill the never ending void in her heart
    An open hole that continue to receive the infinite amount of hope and love that pours from every page

    There is no resistance to her now
    Her body sways to a melody found in the creaking floors beneath
    Her fingers swim in scolding hot water that she uses to clean the dishes
    And she adds a bit of lavender soap because she loves the way it smells

    This is the way He swoons her
    This is her great romance
    Of comfort and strength and safety
    Flooding her with gratitude for every chore that threatens her each morning
    To just close her eyes and pretend she cant do it today

    These voices never win even when she is too weak to whisper




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