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    dots Submission Name: Friday Night Mistakesdots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFriday Night Mistakesdots
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    These girls just wanna party.
    But the choices that they make,
    Usually become the source,
    Of their Friday night mistakes.

    She asks me to refill her cup,
    While we pretend to be in love.
    She's never done this drug before.
    Yet she's already going overboard.
    Now her eyes are big and blue.
    And her body looks unused.
    I got her pleading on the floor.
    Contemplating what she's craving more.

    Cause these girls just wanna party.
    But the choices that we make,
    Usually become the source,
    Of our Friday night mistakes.
    And these girls all say they love me,
    As their hearts begin to break.
    So we numb the pain and ache.
    With our Friday night mistakes.

    Smoke some of this, sniff a line of that.
    Drink until you wanna puke, and starve to not get fat.
    Now she feels beautiful and I'm so fucking high.
    So she does another line, and we fuck to pass the time.

    These girls know how to party.
    And the choices that they make,
    Keep time in slow motion,
    And keep me feeling great.
    These girls all say they love me.
    To numb their own heartbreak.
    A disastrous life to celebrate;
    Our Friday night mistakes.




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      A unique topic but a reality. The choices we make lets us do follies and makes our life disastrous.
    | Posted on 2016-01-22 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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