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    dots Submission Name: Before and Afterdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBefore and Afterdots
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    I wonder what kind of paths I will find

    Before you, my clumsy intentions found only testy roads
    I got dirty
    Mud up to my waste and I fought my way
    Working harder to trudge through

    Before you, my hardened disposition mirrored the way
    My body touched upon hard falls
    And I learned what my own blood looked like
    I was never satisfied

    There were dark days that had the face of virgin winters
    Unfamiliar and so lost
    Storm after storm sent me seeking shelter, into arms that were too weak to hold me
    Safety, validation that my heart was still beating
    Survival, surprise in the sunrise and wondering where I was

    Again and again I saw distorted faces of my enemy
    And I dreamed of things that left me yearning for light

    The mystery has found its way to me now
    On floors made of rubies
    Emerald skies
    Waking up and feeling all that is around me
    Not just breathing
    But being
    Alive

    Now seasons go by and I am dancing
    Nights come.along where my feet don't touch the ground
    When the storms come along i am singing

    Purpose and will are my children
    We plant gardens to feed the days
    We rest and then we celebrate
    We never lose hope or the resources to hope again

    What will the road be like ahead
    Heaven manifest
    Bare feet lightly treading on designer grass
    The sound of angels singing praise
    Multicolor birds resting on sturdy branches that line the way
    And I never get tired of wondering
    What new way I will be walking with you




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      Jaz,

    I like this one a lot. It could be read as written to your husband, your love, or it can be read as someone finding God, and Faith. And I like each interpretation equally. This could easily be me at different parts of my life. I had some very self-destructive tendencies as a young adult. And although I was raised with a strong faith, I'm not sure how much you know about it until you lose it, or perhaps, can't really see it as clearly. I think both have to be tested in the storms of life to really be appreciated. This is going to my faves, so don't delete it!
    Jan
    | Posted on 2016-01-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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