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    dots Submission Name: You look fine to medots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       First in a loooong time and dedicated to th unsung sufferers of Fibro.
    I feel your pain... literally ;)


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    dotsYou look fine to medots
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    Invisible illness is how it should be known
    nothing to see here, no marks to be shown
    these holes act like phantoms, they strike at the nerves
    and nobody notices my third degree burns

    "It's all in your head" is what I was told
    When bloods were examined by those in the know
    So off I was sent with doubts of my sanity
    While my arms and my legs wouldn't listen to me.

    Taking eighteen long years for just one diagnosis
    For a name that is known by only a few
    I jumped up in joy ('though my legs wouldn't hold me)
    until the doctors added "there's nothing that we can do"

    So I sit here today all safe in the knowledge
    This illness won't kill me nor am I insane
    But next, when you see me and can't see the symptoms
    Remember it's real, you just don't know its name.




    Submitted on 2015-12-30 22:06:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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