Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Burdens of a Devil and Dreamdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 796



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBurdens of a Devil and Dreamdots
    -------------------------------------------


    The sultry echo of whimpering and pain,
    created a sacrifice to live for you.
    Silenced by this December rain,
    which someday we wish to be snow.
    Seconds of eternity sacrifice to live for you,
    in an attempt to break the frozen current and row.
    Eidolons unabashed by the horror and fervor,
    clawing for a second chance sacrifice to live for you.
    Their reflections of perfection become beautiful terror,
    immured behind the darkened prison of memory.
    Nostalgia was too cruel a sacrifice to live for you,
    so it has departed for a better place in history.
    Believe the lecherous words in which they revel,
    dreaming hand in hand a sacrifice to live for you.
    Begotten burdens as gifts given from our own Devil.




    Submitted on 2015-12-31 14:11:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    200960

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Love written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    AI written by poetotoe
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Yes written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Where? written by ParanoidParadox
    Every..... written by jackz
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Fasade written by jackz
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Etiquette written by saartha
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    the testing of hypotheses written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Records I written by Raphael
    untitled written by ShyOne
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry