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    dots Submission Name: Puzzleddots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsPuzzleddots
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    Puzzling
    How we fit together
    Cut from the same 1000 piece sheet
    You, the sun
    distinct
    Me, just white cloud
    passing beneath
    Barely touching
    Unknown
    Laid out on that old card table
    almost forgotten
    Toyed with on a rainy day
    when nothing else has purpose
    Tried before
    maybe half hearted
    never thinking it could be done
    Perhaps I was the lost, forgotten piece
    preserved among the dust bunnies
    under the old couch
    Or just the piece that seemed to be always missing
    The puzzle, never to be completed
    Yet here we are
    with some edges worn and frayed,
    but together
    daydreamingly tried, one last time
    Sworn that this is it
    This puzzle
    tried so many times
    Finally, to discover
    everything fits
    everything’s there
    We’re complete




    Submitted on 2016-01-01 09:12:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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