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    dots Submission Name: Sleepdots

    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Sleep is the warmest thing
    That hovers over the crumbling roof of my room
    The loneliest corner has books on mathematics and science
    Most of them suggest there is no God.
    I wonder if scientists and mathematicians live in houses
    Where sleep isn’t the warmest thing.
    I’ve got books on religion too;
    They are neatly arranged inside my refrigerator.
    They all speak of an afterlife.
    The word “Afterlife” was invented in Antarctica
    By some priest who sold ice-creams.
    It leaves me feeling too cold!
    Tonight I yearn to swallow the warmth of sleep
    That crumbles the roof of my room.

    Submitted on 2016-01-02 04:48:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have no idea what's going on here, but I think that makes it a little more fun to read. It made me wonder, why are there books in the refrigerator. It was entertaining. I wasn't sure at first if I liked the way the lines broke, it seemed more like paragraph material for me at first but by the end it seemed to fit.
    | Posted on 2016-01-02 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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