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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsreflective devicesdots
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    internet interests
    laundry hanging on the web
    lines sweet as honey


    ludicrous statements
    without hindsight's benefit
    fish out of water


    selfie-important
    others, reflective mirror
    monkey copies you


    amused by postings;
    remind me one boring day
    to write on the sand



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    Submitted on 2016-01-03 08:27:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This feels tongue-in-cheek. Sarcastic and sassy, like a comedian's dialogue that is really a commentary on humanity thinly veiled by humor. Some of your turns of phrase are interesting; "selfie important" kind of gave me a chuckle. But yes it is a sad condition of the world we collectively find ourselves in. Mindless frittering from one post to another, one subject to another. It is a whole lot of breadth without any depth. And you're right. It's a wonder more people aren't totally bored with it.
    | Posted on 2016-01-22 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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