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    dots Submission Name: I hate youdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 556
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1606



    Description:
       Weirdly, I got halfway through writing this before realising I pretty much took the whole idea and rhyming scheme from the movie "10 things I hate about you"
    Ooops.
    So even if you hate this you must now go rent that movie. it's really great.


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    dotsI hate youdots
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    I hate the way you need to be wanted by others
    That you know you're best alone but hurt deep inside
    You never know just what to say when talking to strangers
    Living so far out the box you could be deaf, dumb and blind

    I hate the way you run, how you hide from your own future
    I hate the way you cry when your feelings explode
    I hate the way that you can't face yourself in the mirror
    The way your face goes red when frustration takes hold

    I hate the way you hate to be the you you were before
    the way you shut off your emotions, when you lock them inside
    You cut off all your ties you try to live with no back history
    I hate both you and all those bridges burned and left behind

    I hate the way you love to dance but never will in public
    The way you love to sing, when you're drunk or alone
    I hate your fear of failure and the way that you prevent it
    When you've given up on everything that you've ever done

    I hate that you never forget the hurtful things that happened
    Still hanging on mistakes from several decades ago
    When you do nothing for yourself yet work your arse off for others
    It's so frustrating that you live without dreams, without hope

    I hate these things and more, I hate the fact that you live
    Wasting up the oxygen each time you take a breath
    I hate everything you hear, hate everything you see
    But I hate you most of all for the fact that you are me




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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, the reason movies are popular and make money is because people can totally relate to them. We are always way less forgiving of ourselves than we are of other people. Why is it that the mistakes that others make we can ignore, but if they are our own, we can totally loathe them. Reading this, someone might think the person has low self-esteem, and that may be true at that moment, but I think most people, women for sure, have characteristics and habits that they hate, yet just can't seem to change them and so hate that quality, too.
    BTW- I love the movie and may have to pull it up to watch again tonight after reading this.
    | Posted on 2016-01-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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