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    dots Submission Name: Stale gumdots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsStale gumdots
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    Poems can be cliché sometimes
    They're allowed to bleed, they're allowed to rhyme
    But they don't always have to

    So then why do we write clichés,
    of our teenage breakups, and shitty days?
    Is it who we are or just a phase?

    I could tell you first hand,
    how those dry nights of writing,
    start to beg for a wet pen, and a bad mood
    or just some different lighting

    And you sit there
    Stirring in your chair
    trying to get the words from thought to paper
    before it's lost in the air

    An air of angst
    with tones of despair
    I remember why she left
    and for my writing's sake
    I'm trying my hardest to care




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